Group: Pitch

Group: Pitch:

• Following the pitch we gave, the rest of the class gave feedback on what they thought about our ideas. The overall response was that we had a good idea but it needed to be clearer to the audience what was going on:

• A number of students commented saying the pen idea was a great, unique idea which would make our film stand out from others. In response to this we have decided to include a third pen scene to clarify what is going on and to make the plot more exciting for the audience.
• A suggestion was made that during the shot where a curve is drawn and the camera cuts to Desmond following that curve, we fade both shots over the top of each other. We took this advice gratefully on board as we think it would clear any doubt as to what is going on and would also be a nice change to the standard cuts we'd be using throughout the rest of the shoot to help focus the audience's attention to the storyline.
• In response to our secondary research into attempting to replicate Zombieland titles, we found it was possible to make them 3D and part of the scene but would be harder to make them react to whats happening in the scene. We decided to get rid of the puddle shot where the title splashes away as we did not want to waste time editing one short clip for ages. Instead we wanted to keep the titles stationary in the scene and 3D which would be okay as long as we kept the font easy to read and simple.
• Another way to clarify the plot to the audience was suggested to us by using a voodoo doll in the scene. The group thought this was a great idea and so decided upon a close up of a voodoo doll swinging from string at some point in the clip.